DNF Review: The Brokenhearted by Amelia Kahaney

Title: The Brokenhearted
Author: Amelia Kahaney

Rating: One Star

Synopsis:

 Prima ballerina Anthem Fleet is closely guarded by her parents in their penthouse apartment. But when she meets the handsome Gavin at a party on the wrong side of town, she is immediately drawn into his dangerous world. Then, in a tragic accident, Anthem falls to her death. She awakes in an underground lab, with a bionic heart ticking in her chest. As she navigates her new life, she uncovers the sinister truth behind those she trusted the most, and the chilling secret of her family lineage…and her duty to uphold it.

The Dark Knight meets Cinder in this gripping and cinematic story of heartbreak and revenge. From Alloy Entertainment, this inventive new superhero story is sure to captivate any reader.

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Why it sucked:
When I saw this book, it looked awesome. It had a gorgeous cover, a pretty cool name, and an interesting synopsis. And yet...

Our main character was not only just inconsistent, she was inconsistent to things she claimed to be consistent about. She was loyal to her ballet, she skips practice...everyday. She was a level-headed girl who made clear choices, she follows a cute stranger around like a puppy dog. She was afraid of losing her virginity, she knows a guy for one week and sleeps with him.

The characters were not only inconsistent, but unbelievable. I couldn't even force myself to believe that this was 'actually' happening.

Gavin. What the fuck, mate? Seriously, you just meet this girl in a club, mind you, so you think she's pretty and paint a gorgeous, breathtaking, life size picture of her...in less than a few days. Yeah, okay, that's totally believable. And then you take her to your secret lair where almost no one has ever been before the second day you've known this chick. And then you sleep with her?!?

I took away one star for the the stupidity of Anthem. Another for the unbelievable characteristics of Gavin. Another for the zero world-building. Another because the author's presence was clearly felt in the story, and I'm not talking writing style. You could feel the author breathing down your neck as you read, it was sort of obvious that she got too excited about the story while writing it, and didn't take any time to actually develop anything properly.

I can't say I'm entirely sure why I even gave it one star. Maybe because I didn't finish it and I felt bad about that? Whatever.

For anyone who read the synopsis, just please know that this was nothing like Cinder, which was a fantastic and captivating retelling of Cinderella, nor was it like The Dark Knight, where at least the Joker was pretty freaking awesome. The instalove and the pathetic-ness of Anthem and Gavin just distracted me from the actual plot of the book...actually, I think that was the plot...


xxAvalon